http://profootballtalk.nbcsports.com/2017/09/28/davante-adams-leaves-on-stretcher-after-brutal-crown-of-the-helmet-hit/?cid=eref:nbcnews:text
The article did a good job on explain on what happened to Davante Adams as he was brutally tackled to the ground by the Bears linebacker Danny Trevathan. They included that the tackle knocked him out and caused his mouthpiece to fly out his mouth. The article also did a good job in including that Trevathan had not been ejected, and got a response from former vice president of officiating in the NFL, Mike Pereira, and he concluded that he would've ejected Trevathan.
What the article could've done better was included pictures of the play when Adams got tackled so that way the viewers could also see the helmet on the ground as well as the shot of the mouthpiece flying out of Adams mouth. The article could've done better on getting a report of the Packers coach and asked for his opinion on the matter. Other than that the article was short, thought it was informative on the matter of the tackle.
If I were to write an article over this matter I would've included what others thought of the play and would've questioned the other players to see if they thought Trevathan should've been ejected. I also would've included what the article had put in and asked the Mike Pereira on his thoughts over the situation. To make my article stronger, I would've included pictures of the tackle with shots from the mouthpiece flying out from the helmet on the ground to Adams being carried off on the stretcher. Other than that, that is what I would've included on my article to make it more professional and stronger. This week I edited the football on homecoming week and was able to collaborate with Ryan as he helped me write the shot sheet. The collaboration really helped me learn a few more football terms as well as what to include on the shot sheets like thoroughly explain a play.
Friday, September 29, 2017
Friday, September 22, 2017
Back Injury to Sideline Tight End Tyler Eifert
http://www.espn.com/nfl/story/_/id/20785019/back-injury-sideline-cincinnati-bengals-te-tyler-eifert-sunday-game-green-bay-packers
The article did a good job on elaborating why Tyler Eifert didn't play last Thursday and missed a full week of practice because of his back injury. This means they kept up to date with the player's absence. The article also did a good job on informing how many back injuries Eifert has had in the pass and included on why he has missed many games due to his injuries. Eifert has never completed a full season since signing with the Bengals back in 2013 due to ankle/back injuries.
What the article could've done better is that they didn't include Eifert's condition at the moment. It would've been better to get an interview with the coach and if possibly Effort himself. The article was kept short with an informative tone but should've added emotion on whether or not fans were devastated with his absence. The article could've also added pictures of Eifert getting hurt and pictures of him getting hurt in the past.
If I were to do and article over the topic, I would've included pictures of Eifert's past injuries as well as the recent one he has from Last Thursday. I would also include an interview with the coach and ask about his feelings of whether or not Eifert was a very valuable player since he has yet to finish a complete season. I would also include exactly how many injuries he has had in the past.
This week I didn't have any editing to do since the last game was an away game. However, I did help Nicole and Rosie with the script to the best of my ability as well as find highlights for the SMN preview clip.
The article did a good job on elaborating why Tyler Eifert didn't play last Thursday and missed a full week of practice because of his back injury. This means they kept up to date with the player's absence. The article also did a good job on informing how many back injuries Eifert has had in the pass and included on why he has missed many games due to his injuries. Eifert has never completed a full season since signing with the Bengals back in 2013 due to ankle/back injuries.
What the article could've done better is that they didn't include Eifert's condition at the moment. It would've been better to get an interview with the coach and if possibly Effort himself. The article was kept short with an informative tone but should've added emotion on whether or not fans were devastated with his absence. The article could've also added pictures of Eifert getting hurt and pictures of him getting hurt in the past.
If I were to do and article over the topic, I would've included pictures of Eifert's past injuries as well as the recent one he has from Last Thursday. I would also include an interview with the coach and ask about his feelings of whether or not Eifert was a very valuable player since he has yet to finish a complete season. I would also include exactly how many injuries he has had in the past.
This week I didn't have any editing to do since the last game was an away game. However, I did help Nicole and Rosie with the script to the best of my ability as well as find highlights for the SMN preview clip.
Friday, September 15, 2017
Sports Package Article
http://www.goal.com/en-us/news/enough-with-the-barcelona-talk-its-time-for-philippe-coutinho-to-/18l62vyqihg7n1tuf26q13fzwt
In this article where they talk about the soccer player Philippe Coutinho and how he was gladly received to the club Liverpool after being denied into Barcelona. The article does a good job explaining that Coutinho, a native Brazilian, had the ambition and skills to play up to the Liverpool level. The crowd cheered him on once they put on the field after substituting Emre Can. The article was able to put information of why Coutinho was a valuable player and how he connected and fit in well with the team.
The article was bad at explaining exactly why Barcelona didn't accept Coutinho in the first place. They could have elaborated more on that part to improve the article as well as get insighgt of how he has helped the club improve and what skills and strategies he has brought to the team. The article could have also interviewed Coutinho and given his opinion on the club and on his relationship with the resto of his teammates.
What I would take from this article is that it gives me the idea to do background research on a team on a specific player. Try to include interviews from other players as well as coaches. If there a specific player that I am writing about, I would want to interview that player as well. I would also include live footage of the player while they are in action. That is what I would do for a sports article.
In this article where they talk about the soccer player Philippe Coutinho and how he was gladly received to the club Liverpool after being denied into Barcelona. The article does a good job explaining that Coutinho, a native Brazilian, had the ambition and skills to play up to the Liverpool level. The crowd cheered him on once they put on the field after substituting Emre Can. The article was able to put information of why Coutinho was a valuable player and how he connected and fit in well with the team.
The article was bad at explaining exactly why Barcelona didn't accept Coutinho in the first place. They could have elaborated more on that part to improve the article as well as get insighgt of how he has helped the club improve and what skills and strategies he has brought to the team. The article could have also interviewed Coutinho and given his opinion on the club and on his relationship with the resto of his teammates.
What I would take from this article is that it gives me the idea to do background research on a team on a specific player. Try to include interviews from other players as well as coaches. If there a specific player that I am writing about, I would want to interview that player as well. I would also include live footage of the player while they are in action. That is what I would do for a sports article.
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