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The article did a good job on explain on what happened to Davante Adams as he was brutally tackled to the ground by the Bears linebacker Danny Trevathan. They included that the tackle knocked him out and caused his mouthpiece to fly out his mouth. The article also did a good job in including that Trevathan had not been ejected, and got a response from former vice president of officiating in the NFL, Mike Pereira, and he concluded that he would've ejected Trevathan.
What the article could've done better was included pictures of the play when Adams got tackled so that way the viewers could also see the helmet on the ground as well as the shot of the mouthpiece flying out of Adams mouth. The article could've done better on getting a report of the Packers coach and asked for his opinion on the matter. Other than that the article was short, thought it was informative on the matter of the tackle.
If I were to write an article over this matter I would've included what others thought of the play and would've questioned the other players to see if they thought Trevathan should've been ejected. I also would've included what the article had put in and asked the Mike Pereira on his thoughts over the situation. To make my article stronger, I would've included pictures of the tackle with shots from the mouthpiece flying out from the helmet on the ground to Adams being carried off on the stretcher. Other than that, that is what I would've included on my article to make it more professional and stronger. This week I edited the football on homecoming week and was able to collaborate with Ryan as he helped me write the shot sheet. The collaboration really helped me learn a few more football terms as well as what to include on the shot sheets like thoroughly explain a play.
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