http://www.foxnews.com/sports/2017/12/07/olympic-star-lindsey-vonn-says-wont-represent-trump-at-2018-winter-games.html
The article is talking about how Lindsey Vonn will "represent the United States, not the president" during the Winter Olympic games this February. The article was short, with the majority of it being what Vonn had to say her pride and how to represent the United States "respectfully, unlike current people in the government." The article did good in also including pictures of Lindsey without her ski gear and also showing pictures of her in action. The article also did a good job in keeping the article short and to the point, and they also included the fact she couldn't participate in 2014 because of knee injuries.
What the article could've done better is just put more information instead of just having the rest of the article be quotes of what Vonn said. Other than that, the article was written without that many flaws. The writer did good in what to include and even if it was short, the writer knew what to put in the article in order to make it strong and reliable.
If I were to write this article, I would do exactly what the writer did, but in order to improve it, I wouldn't just write the rest of the articles and finish it with quotes. I would write more information on her background with who she voted since she doesn't like Trump. I would also praise her, in my opinion, on talking respectfully and clearly and setting her views about Trump and how she is woke. Other than that, that is how I would do my article.
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