http://www.sportingnews.com/au/other-sports/news/slaters-touching-message-to-injured-jillaroo-australia-kangaroos-rugby-league-world-cup/xz1iyd2q6p5n1dgqijphs3ydl
The article did a good job on letting the viewer know that Billy Slater left a voicemail and what exactly he left on the message to Jollier on the message after he was weeks off because of a shoulder injury he had. The article was brief and got straight to the point so the author did really good in that since the story really didn't need that much information.
What the article could've done better was including what relationship Billy Slater had with Jollier. Could've had more background information on the injury and on why Slater left the "motivational" voicemail. They should've also included pictures of Slater and Jollier so the viewer knows how they look like.
If I were to do this article I would do exactly as the writer did it. They did a really great job in it and they kept it brief. What I would've included was pictures as well as the friendship both of them had. Other than that I would've made it a bit more informational but I would've kept the article short. That is what I would've done if I did this article.
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