http://www.sportingnews.com/au/other-sports/news/slaters-touching-message-to-injured-jillaroo-australia-kangaroos-rugby-league-world-cup/xz1iyd2q6p5n1dgqijphs3ydl
The article did a good job on letting the viewer know that Billy Slater left a voicemail and what exactly he left on the message to Jollier on the message after he was weeks off because of a shoulder injury he had. The article was brief and got straight to the point so the author did really good in that since the story really didn't need that much information.
What the article could've done better was including what relationship Billy Slater had with Jollier. Could've had more background information on the injury and on why Slater left the "motivational" voicemail. They should've also included pictures of Slater and Jollier so the viewer knows how they look like.
If I were to do this article I would do exactly as the writer did it. They did a really great job in it and they kept it brief. What I would've included was pictures as well as the friendship both of them had. Other than that I would've made it a bit more informational but I would've kept the article short. That is what I would've done if I did this article.
Monday, December 4, 2017
Friday, November 17, 2017
Incident in China
https://www.usnews.com/news/sports/articles/2017-11-14/trump-hopes-swift-return-of-ucla-players-detained-in-china
The article was talking about how the three men that attend UCLA and play in the basketball team Freshmen LiAngelo Ball, Cody Riley, and Jalen Hill returned back home to the United States after being detained in China for shoplifting. The article made sure to include what President Trump has done to compromise the freedom of the three men to get them back home and all charges be dropped. The article was of good amount of size and very informative. Not too long but not short at all. It went straight to the point.
What the author could've done better was gotten pictures of all three boys when they were coming out of the Los Angeles airport. They only included a picture of Ball looking down. They did a good job and other than that that is what the author should've done to make it stronger so the viewers know how the boys look like.
If I were to do an article about the boy's return to the United States I would include the information the article already had plus pictures of all three boys. The article included information that was valid instead of irrelevant fact that did not need to be included in. I would also include pictures of all he boys so the viewer knows how each of them looks like. Another piece I would include would be the background--what happened in China and how the whole incident went down. Other than that, the is what I would include in my article and the article did a great job in the article.
Friday, November 10, 2017
Technical Improvement
This week, I have improved my technical abilities by working production. This week, I have worked audio when we were producing the Raven Minute. I've done it the week before as well, but I did it again so that way I would regain the knowledge. Had a bit of problem knowing what to do at first, but I remembered to do the rest as we kept redoing the show. I have also improved on my technical skills by working on the tri-caster. I knew exactly what to do without any problems except knowing when to switch screens at the given time. That is how I have improved on my technical skills this week!
Friday, November 3, 2017
Home Run Proposal
https://www.usatoday.com/story/sports/mlb/2017/11/02/carlos-correa-proposes-girlfriend-after-astros-win-world-series/824205001/
After winning the World Series, Carlos Correa took the chance to propose to his girlfriend. This article isn't exactly sports related but there was two things Correa ended up celebrating that night. The article isn't exactly about the Astros winning the world series but about proposal after the game. The article did very good in including pictures of the happy couple smiling at the camera after he proposed. They did a good job of putting in quotes of what Correa said during the proposal and his interview. The article was short and brief, and got straight to the point by being informative but having a more lightened mood to it.
What the article did wrong is hard to pick out. This is because it gave the important details while it being bored and kept short, which was a very good idea. The only thing the article could've improved on would be including the actual video of the proposal as well as pictures while it went down. Other than that, it was a good article.
If I were to write an article like this, I would definitely input pictures/video of the situation so that way the curious readers wouldn't have to search for them. I would also keep it short and brief because even though I am writing about the proposal, I am a sports writer and wouldn't want one of my articles to be long and a romantic/sappy toned for those who stumble upon it. Other than that, that is how I would do my article. This week I was a leader as I was able to do something different and actually work sound for game day the first time since I've been in e-comm. Was very easy and I was proud to know I could do it even if the only thing I did was press two buttons.
After winning the World Series, Carlos Correa took the chance to propose to his girlfriend. This article isn't exactly sports related but there was two things Correa ended up celebrating that night. The article isn't exactly about the Astros winning the world series but about proposal after the game. The article did very good in including pictures of the happy couple smiling at the camera after he proposed. They did a good job of putting in quotes of what Correa said during the proposal and his interview. The article was short and brief, and got straight to the point by being informative but having a more lightened mood to it.
What the article did wrong is hard to pick out. This is because it gave the important details while it being bored and kept short, which was a very good idea. The only thing the article could've improved on would be including the actual video of the proposal as well as pictures while it went down. Other than that, it was a good article.
If I were to write an article like this, I would definitely input pictures/video of the situation so that way the curious readers wouldn't have to search for them. I would also keep it short and brief because even though I am writing about the proposal, I am a sports writer and wouldn't want one of my articles to be long and a romantic/sappy toned for those who stumble upon it. Other than that, that is how I would do my article. This week I was a leader as I was able to do something different and actually work sound for game day the first time since I've been in e-comm. Was very easy and I was proud to know I could do it even if the only thing I did was press two buttons.
Friday, October 27, 2017
Crutches aren't a problem
https://www.msn.com/en-us/sports/nfl/texans-jj-watt-throws-out-first-pitch-while-on-crutches/ar-AAu90BC
A good thing this article did was include a video of the footage of JJ Watts in crutches throwing his first pitch sine being on crutches. The pictures the article used were really good and showed Watts pitching while on crutches. The video did good in informing the audience of the situation and they saw the reaction of Watts as he pitched.
Things the article did not do good in was making the actual article less informative. They had only a couple short paragraphs while they could have added more to the information in order to keep the audience interested in the story. The article could've also done better in putting more information of what event went down in order for Watts to get himself crutches.
If I were to write this article I would include a video just like the article did but I would also include more background information of what occurred to Watts in order for him to get crutches. I would include pictures of the event also. I would try my best to make the article more longer at least a good more than a couple paragraphs. This week I wasn't really in class as I was sick and so I wasn't in class for the majority of this week. A way I collaborated however was that I decided to help in production for Raven Roundup and that for me is an accomplishment because I helped produce for the first time this year in the studio.
A good thing this article did was include a video of the footage of JJ Watts in crutches throwing his first pitch sine being on crutches. The pictures the article used were really good and showed Watts pitching while on crutches. The video did good in informing the audience of the situation and they saw the reaction of Watts as he pitched.
Things the article did not do good in was making the actual article less informative. They had only a couple short paragraphs while they could have added more to the information in order to keep the audience interested in the story. The article could've also done better in putting more information of what event went down in order for Watts to get himself crutches.
If I were to write this article I would include a video just like the article did but I would also include more background information of what occurred to Watts in order for him to get crutches. I would include pictures of the event also. I would try my best to make the article more longer at least a good more than a couple paragraphs. This week I wasn't really in class as I was sick and so I wasn't in class for the majority of this week. A way I collaborated however was that I decided to help in production for Raven Roundup and that for me is an accomplishment because I helped produce for the first time this year in the studio.
Monday, October 16, 2017
Packers not not planing on getting new QB after Aaron Rogers injury
https://www.cbssports.com/nfl/news/packers-dont-plan-on-adding-colin-kaepernick-after-aaron-rodgers-injury/
The article did a good job in evaluating why the Packer's coach, Mike McCarthy, did not go ahead and try to sign a new QB to replace Aaron Rogers after his injury against the Vikings. The article included an interview with McCarthy, in which he stated that he "had trust" and "is more than happy to move forward with the quarterbacks he has on roster." The article did good in including that McCarthy put his trust in his backup Brett Hundley for the rest of the season. The article also did good in including an interview from Hundley and on how he feels about the change. The article wasn't done with interviews as they did a great job of including an opinion of another Packer's player and give his insight of what Hundley brought to the game plan.
Although the article did a very good job in including the important information, they could've done a bit better. The article could've done better in including pictures of Roger's injury. They could've also included Roger's input of how he feels in not being able to play the rest of the season and how he feels in Hundley taking over his position.
If I were to write an article over this topic, I would've included pictures over the people being interviewed so that way people who don't know any of the players will be given an image of them. I would've included NFL sport commentators interviews as well to see what they thought of McCarthy's decision of putting Hundley as QB instead of just signing someone else for Roger's position. Other than that, the article did a good job in including the important information for a reader. This week I collaborated in working with broadcast. I went to ODAC with the rest of the class and I did better in setting up the equipment. When the game was over, I helped out in collecting the equipment to send it over back to the school. That is how I collaborated for this week.
The article did a good job in evaluating why the Packer's coach, Mike McCarthy, did not go ahead and try to sign a new QB to replace Aaron Rogers after his injury against the Vikings. The article included an interview with McCarthy, in which he stated that he "had trust" and "is more than happy to move forward with the quarterbacks he has on roster." The article did good in including that McCarthy put his trust in his backup Brett Hundley for the rest of the season. The article also did good in including an interview from Hundley and on how he feels about the change. The article wasn't done with interviews as they did a great job of including an opinion of another Packer's player and give his insight of what Hundley brought to the game plan.
Although the article did a very good job in including the important information, they could've done a bit better. The article could've done better in including pictures of Roger's injury. They could've also included Roger's input of how he feels in not being able to play the rest of the season and how he feels in Hundley taking over his position.
If I were to write an article over this topic, I would've included pictures over the people being interviewed so that way people who don't know any of the players will be given an image of them. I would've included NFL sport commentators interviews as well to see what they thought of McCarthy's decision of putting Hundley as QB instead of just signing someone else for Roger's position. Other than that, the article did a good job in including the important information for a reader. This week I collaborated in working with broadcast. I went to ODAC with the rest of the class and I did better in setting up the equipment. When the game was over, I helped out in collecting the equipment to send it over back to the school. That is how I collaborated for this week.
Friday, October 6, 2017
Dannon Cuts ties with Cam Newton
https://www.usatoday.com/story/sports/nfl/panthers/2017/10/05/dannon-cut-ties-panthers-quarterback-cam-newton/735648001/
The article did a good job in explaining why Dannon cut ties with Carolina Panther's quarterback Cam Newton. They explained that they cut ties with him because of his sexist comment towards Jourdan Rodrigue. He laughed and said during the interview that "it was funny seeing a female talk routes." Dannon has no tolerance with this kind of behavior and were shocked to hear the comment. The article did a good job in also talking to other companies that are sponsoring Newton and put in the fact that those other companies, except one of them, were quick to declare that they wont tolerate this kind of behavior as they support women in sports on and off field.
The article was short but covered everything they needed to. The article even made sure to include the interview where Newton made the sexist comment. One thing I would say they should include is the coaches views on what Newton had said. I would also include another interview in how Newton feels after he made the sexist comment and on the criticism he is receiving. Other than that, the article got all important points and was very strong.
If I were to make this article I would definitely put what this article had. Each interview and as well add videos. However, to make it a stronger article, I would also add an interview on Newton's coaches point of view and how they feel about his comments and all the backlash the quarterback received. That is how I would make the article stronger. This week I was a leader as I helped with working on broadcast. I helped set up for the football and I stayed after the game to pick up all the equipment and bring it back to the school. I made sure to bring as much equipment into the car and carried as much equipment as I could since there was only a few of us.
The article did a good job in explaining why Dannon cut ties with Carolina Panther's quarterback Cam Newton. They explained that they cut ties with him because of his sexist comment towards Jourdan Rodrigue. He laughed and said during the interview that "it was funny seeing a female talk routes." Dannon has no tolerance with this kind of behavior and were shocked to hear the comment. The article did a good job in also talking to other companies that are sponsoring Newton and put in the fact that those other companies, except one of them, were quick to declare that they wont tolerate this kind of behavior as they support women in sports on and off field.
The article was short but covered everything they needed to. The article even made sure to include the interview where Newton made the sexist comment. One thing I would say they should include is the coaches views on what Newton had said. I would also include another interview in how Newton feels after he made the sexist comment and on the criticism he is receiving. Other than that, the article got all important points and was very strong.
If I were to make this article I would definitely put what this article had. Each interview and as well add videos. However, to make it a stronger article, I would also add an interview on Newton's coaches point of view and how they feel about his comments and all the backlash the quarterback received. That is how I would make the article stronger. This week I was a leader as I helped with working on broadcast. I helped set up for the football and I stayed after the game to pick up all the equipment and bring it back to the school. I made sure to bring as much equipment into the car and carried as much equipment as I could since there was only a few of us.
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